Tripladin Massacre

**Three new moons ago,** *Editor note: Beings may be reading this from star systems with different lunar cycles to our own.* [[Rewrite as per editorial suggestions|twenty-seven planetary rotations]] [[Reject editorial suggestions|no thanks 1]]

Three new moons ago **Twenty-seven planetary rotations ago,** *Editor note: Which planet's rotation? Salangrazar has a planetary mass equivalent to some entire star systems, meaning our days are relatively long.* [[Rewrite as per editorial suggestions|five hundred and]] [[Reject editorial suggestions|thank you for 4]]

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Twenty-seven planetary rotations ago **Five hundred and forty Salangrazarian hours ago,** *Editor note: An hour is not a standard unit of time throughout the galaxy.* [[Rewrite as per editorial suggestions|at some point 1]] [[Reject editorial suggestions|that's a negative]]

**Thank you for your submission.** But give us a little wriggle room with suggestions. You have to realise the galaxy doesn't revolve around you. And if there is such thing as the Great Attractor in the universe that is the centre of all, I'm pretty sure it's not you. Sincerely, Salangrazarian Publishing Department [[Try editing this story again|BEGIN]]

Five hundred and forty Salangrazarian hours ago **At some point in the recent past,** *Editor note: Recent is a subjective term. Do you think the tiny Kraskan Fleamen with their short lives regard three new moons ago as recent when several generations die in that time?* [[Rewrite as per editorial suggestions|at some point]] [[Reject editorial suggestions|gratitude for your]]

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At some point in the recent past, *Editor note: I know purple prose is frowned upon, but this lacks any kind of flair.* [[Rewrite as per editorial suggestions|once upon a]] [[Reject editorial suggestions|sorry for the]]

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Once upon a time, the savage Salangrazar Dictatorship **a collection of Salangrazar officials** *Editor note: This may work better with a clearly defined antagonist. Perhaps describe a single antagonist we can hate.* [[Rewrite as per editorial suggestions|a gruddy official]] [[Reject editorial suggestions|thank you for 5]]

**Thanks for allowing us to consider your story.** As much as we like the start of this story, we also don't want to be sent to the Slugplains of Waranbut for publishing it, so cannot accept your submission. Please consider us in the future. Regards, Salangrazarian Publishing Department [[Try editing this story again|BEGIN]]

Once upon a time, a collection of Salangrazar officials **a Gruddy official** *Editor note: Nice description, but Grud as slang for ugly isn't a term many beings will be familiar with. If Gruds pick up on the meaning, they may find the use of their name as an adjective in this context offensive. The original Grududian translation of their name actually translates to 'an ogre serving the prince'. Maybe this can be used somehow so it is less controversial.* [[Rewrite as per editorial suggestions|a prince's ogre-man-official]] [[Reject editorial suggestions|we aren't going]]

**Thank you for submitting.** Alas, your work stinks. And when we say stink, we mean it stinks worse than the Slugplains of Waranbut. All the best, Salangrazarian Publishing Department [[Try editing this story again|BEGIN]]

At some point in the past **Once upon a time, the savage Salangrazar Dictatorship** *Editor note: Unless you want to be sent to the Slugplains of Waranbut, I wouldn't refer to them as savage dictators.* [[Rewrite as per editorial suggestions|a collection of]] [[Reject editorial suggestions|thanks for allowing]]

Once upon a time, a Gruddy official **a prince's ogre-man-official** *Editor note: The phrasing is a bit clumsy here. Maybe shorten to 'prince'.* [[Rewrite as per editorial suggestions|a prince]] [[Reject editorial suggestions|unfortunately the work]]

**We aren't going to accept your story this time.** You may think we are also a bunch of heartless Gruddy editors, but we receive billions of submissions each reading period and only accept a handful. Regards, Salangrazarian Publishing Department P.S. When we say handful we mean a Salangrazarian handful, not the handful of a Krasken Fleaman or a Gigagruffan, but a reasonable sized handful of submissions. [[Try editing this story again|BEGIN]]

Once upon a time, a prince's ogre-man-official **a prince** *Editor note: But what does this prince look like? Some hint at his appearance would help provide a visual. The Salangrazarian government epitomises Grududian standards of beauty so you could describe him as good looking.* [[Rewrite as per editorial suggestions|once upon a 1]] [[Reject editorial suggestions|we appreciate your 1]]

**Unfortunately, the work you submitted is absolutely God-awful.** And I'm sure any of the six billion known deities in our galaxy would agree. Sincerely, Salangrazarian Publishing Department [[Try editing this story again|BEGIN]]

Once upon a time, a **handsome** prince **fired fungal missiles at the Tripladinian capital.** *Editor note: Not all beings will know what a fungal missile is. Show this in more detail.* [[Rewrite as per editorial suggestions|fired missiles that]] [[Reject editorial suggestions|nope]]

**We appreciate your efforts, but this work isn't right for us.** Please excuse the impersonal rejection, but no person or other beings in our department had the time to explain how terrible this was. Regards, Salangrazarian Publishing Department [[Try editing this story again|BEGIN]]

Once upon a time, a handsome prince fired fungal missiles at the Tripladinian capital **fired missiles that ejected fungal spores, piercing flesh and cannibalising inhabitants of the Tripladinian capital.** *Editor note: Only two percent of planets in the galaxy have evolved fungus, so this might be lost in translation. Perhaps substitute with a type of plant, as plants are far more prevalent in this part of the galaxy and more similar to fungi than any other kingdom.* [[Rewrite as per editorial suggestions|fired missiles that 1]] [[Reject editorial suggestions|no thanks sorry]]

**Nope.** Our rejection is as vague as your story. Salangrazarian Publishing Department [[Try editing this story again|BEGIN]]

Once upon a time, a handsome prince fired missiles that ejected fungal spores, piercing flesh and cannibalising inhabitants of the Tripladinian capital **fired missiles that ejected vines that cannibalised inhabitants of the Tripladinian capital.** *Editor note: Can vines technically be "ejected" from a missile?* [[Rewrite as per editorial suggestions|fought with vines]] [[Reject editorial suggestions|no thank you]]

**No thanks. Sorry.** Sorry this response may not be what you wanted, but we are a publishing department inclusive of all beings. Works need to be understood and appreciated by everyone in the galaxy. Sincerely, Salangrazarian Publishing Department [[Try editing this story again|BEGIN]]

Once upon a time, a handsome prince fired missiles that ejected vines that cannibalised inhabitants of the Tripladinian capital **fought with vines that cannibalised inhabitants of the Tripladinian capital.** *Editor note: Can you really fight 'with' vines? They're floppy and wouldn't do much damage if you hit someone with them. It is hard to visualise fighting any other way.* *There are also tribes on the outskirt of Rguzar IV that still practice legal cannibalism of the sick and elderly. They might find this offensive. Can you remove the reference to cannibalism and rewrite to get rid of 'with'?* [[Rewrite as per editorial suggestions|fought vines covering]] [[Reject editorial suggestions|thank you]]

**No thank you.** Are you really *that* stubborn? It's just a minor change. Regards, Salangrazarian Publishing Department [[Try editing this story again|BEGIN]]

Once upon a time, a handsome prince fought with vines that cannibalised inhabitants of the Tripladinian capital **fought vines covering Tripladin.** *Editor note: Can you add some specifics on how the prince fought the vines e.g. fought how and with what?* [[Rewrite as per editorial suggestions|once upon a 2]] [[Reject editorial suggestions|thank you for 6]]

**Thank you.** We have received your work. Unfortunately it doesn't fit our needs at this time. All the best for your future endeavours. We suggest these endeavours steer clear of writing. Salangrazarian Publishing Department [[Try editing this story again|BEGIN]]

Once upon a time, a handsome prince fought vines covering Tripladin **hacked away vines covering Tripladin with his magic sword. The Tripladinian women, who survived, were gassed and enslaved.** *Editor note: Consider a single protagonist with whom we can sympathise. Prince was used earlier so maybe use a princess as the protagonist to keep things consistent.* [[Rewrite as per editorial suggestions|the beautiful princess]] [[Reject editorial suggestions|thanks but no]]

**Thank you for taking the time to submit, but we don't like your story.** Regards, Salangrazarian Publishing Department [[Try editing this story again|BEGIN]]

Once upon a time, a handsome prince hacked away vines covering Tripladin with his magic sword. The Tripladinian women, who survived, were gassed and enslaved **The beautiful princess was gassed and enslaved.** *Editor note: Did the gas kill the princess or was it sleeping gas? And enslaved where?* [[Rewrite as per editorial suggestions|the beautiful princess 1]] [[Reject editorial suggestions|nope 1]]

**Thanks, but no thanks.** Salangrazarian Publishing Department [[Try editing this story again|BEGIN]]

Once upon a time, a handsome prince hacked away vines covering Tripladin with his magic sword. The beautiful princess was gassed and enslaved **The beautiful princess was put to sleep and locked in Tripladin's donjon's oubliette.** *Editor note: Is that a type of castle? 'Put to' is a weak verb.* [[Rewrite as per editorial suggestions|once upon a 3]] [[Reject editorial suggestions|sorry this is]]

**No.** Sorry that our rejection is vague, but so is your story. Salangrazarian Publishing Department [[Try editing this story again|BEGIN]]

Once upon a time, a handsome prince fought vines covering Tripladin. The beautiful princess was put to sleep and locked in Tripladin's donjon's oubliette **Inside the castle, a beautiful princess slept. Hundreds awoke from the gassing to find government officials brutally raping them to the point where they were red raw.** *Editor note: Needs to be consistent with previous edits e.g. single protagonist and antagonists.* [[Rewrite as per editorial suggestions|the princess awoke]] [[Reject editorial suggestions|we appreciate your]]

**Sorry. This is not for us.** Regards, Salangrazarian Publishing Department [[Try editing this story again|BEGIN]]

Once upon a time, a handsome prince hacked away vines covering Tripladin with his magic sword. Inside the castle, a beautiful princess slept. Hundreds awoke from the gassing to find government officials brutally raping them to the point where they were red raw **The princess awoke from her sleep to find the handsome prince brutally raping her to the point where she was red raw.** *Editor note: References to such graphic rape may be a trigger for those beings who have experienced such trauma.* [[Rewrite as per editorial suggestions|the princess awoke 1]] [[Reject editorial suggestions|we didn't really]]

**We appreciate your submission, but cannot accept it at this time.** Although our submission guidelines state we consider violence, we found this too gratuitous for our liking. Thank you for your interest, Salangrazarian Publishing Department [[Try editing this story again|BEGIN]]

Once upon a time, a handsome prince hacked away vines covering Tripladin with his magic sword. Inside the castle, a beautiful princess slept. The princess awoke from her sleep to find the handsome prince brutally raping her to the point where she was red raw **The princess awoke from her sleep to discover the handsome prince forcing himself on her until she was red raw.** *Editor note: I know children aren't the intended audience, but it's possible they could be exposed to this, so keep it G-rated. Maybe you could use lips, as a metaphor for the princess's other lips. Younger beings won't pick up on the reference.* [[Rewrite as per editorial suggestions|the princess awoke 2]] [[Reject editorial suggestions|we cannot accept]]

**We didn't really care for this story.** The truth is out there, but we do not permit it to enter our publishing department. Sincerely, Salangrazarian Publishing Department [[Try editing this story again|BEGIN]]

Once upon a time, a handsome prince hacked away vines covering Tripladin with his magic sword. Inside the castle, a beautiful princess slept. The princess awoke from her sleep to discover the handsome prince forcing himself on her until she was red raw **as the handsome prince kissed her lips until they were red raw.** *Editor note: 'Until they were red raw' is a tad convoluted.* [[Rewrite as per editorial suggestions|the princess awoke 3]] [[Reject editorial suggestions|sorry]]

**We cannot accept your submission at this time.** Although our submission guidelines state we consider sex and violence, we prefer stories don't. Thank you for your interest, Salangrazarian Publishing Department [[Try editing this story again|BEGIN]]

Once upon a time, a handsome prince hacked away vines covering Tripladin with his magic sword. Inside the castle, a beautiful princess slept. The princess awoke as the handsome prince kissed her **red raw** lips until they were red raw. *Editor note: Do you need both adjectives and is there a more interesting one you can use? How about ruby or crimson?* [[Rewrite as per editorial suggestions|the princess awoke 4]] [[Reject editorial suggestions|unfortunately that's a]]

**Sorry.** Regards, SPD [[Try editing this story again|BEGIN]]

Once upon a time, a handsome prince hacked away vines covering Tripladin with his magic sword. Inside the castle, a beautiful princess slept. The princess awoke as the handsome prince kissed her red raw **ruby** lips. **The conflict continues.** *Editor note: Open-ended stories with dark endings are okay; after all, the universe we live in is random, brutal, and indifferent. However, readers also need reassurance we can have some closure and happiness at the end.* [[Rewrite as per editorial suggestions|the princess escaped]] [[Reject editorial suggestions|unfortunately your story]]

**Unfortunately, that's a big fat no.** And when we say big, we mean as big as a Gigagruffan. Cheers, Salangrazarian Publishing Department [[Try editing this story again|BEGIN]]

Once upon a time, a handsome prince hacked away vines covering Tripladin with his magic sword. Inside the castle, a beautiful princess slept. The princess awoke as the handsome prince kissed her ruby lips. The conflict continues **The princess escaped the handsome prince, and she lived happily ever after in a magical land with singing trees wandering the lollypop-covered hillsides as flying ponies soared through the magenta sky.** *Editor note: Unless you are living on the planet Shzluckzabin, readers might find this a bit farfetched.* [[Rewrite as per editorial suggestions|and she lived]] [[Reject editorial suggestions|no spd]]

**Unfortunately, your story is surplus to our requirements.** This submission made it to our final round. However, the ending just left us feeling flat and uninspired. Regards, Salangrazarian Publishing Department [[Try editing this story again|BEGIN]]

Once upon a time, a handsome prince hacked away vines covering Tripladin with his magic sword. Inside the castle, a beautiful princess slept. The princess awoke as the handsome prince kissed her ruby lips The princess escaped the handsome prince, and she lived happily ever after in a magical land with singing trees wandering the lollypop-covered hillsides as flying ponies soared through the magenta sky **And she lived happily ever after.** [[ACCEPT ALL EDITORIAL CHANGES|thank you for]] [[REJECT ALL EDITORIAL CHANGES|thank you for 3]]

**No.** SPD [[Try editing this story again|BEGIN]]

**Thank you for your submission to the Salangrazarian Publishing Department. We are happy to accept the following story.** Once upon a time, a handsome prince fought vines covering Tripladin. Inside the castle, a beautiful princess slept. The princess awoke as the handsome prince kissed her ruby lips. And she lived happily ever after. However, we would like to change the title to The Tripladin Princess. [[Change the title and collect your payment|salangrazarian publishing department]] [[Reject the suggested title change|are you certain]]

**Thank you for your submission to the Salangrazarian Publishing Department. We regret to inform you that we cannot publish the following story.** Three new moons ago, the Salangrazarian Government fired fungal missiles at the Tripladinian capital. Millions of Tripladinian women were gassed and enslaved. Hundreds awoke from the gassing to find government officials brutally raping them to the point where they were red raw. The conflict continues. [[Change your mind and accept all editorial changes|thank you for]] [[Try editing this story again|BEGIN]]

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**Are you certain?** The story hardly seems like a massacre anymore. Besides nothing like that *ever* happens in our galaxy. After all the edits, you're going to be *that* petty about a story title? If you refuse, there might still be a ship heading to the Slugplains of Waranbut with your name on it. [[Change the title and collect your payment|salangrazarian publishing department]] [[Reject the suggested title change|you have reached 2]]

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