A Man In His Life

Really loved this week’s publication. That was an amazing poem and I like the way it was made interactive.

My one critique – I found that reading the Ecclesiastes bits while I was midway through reading a stanza felt a bit broken, like it was interrupting the poet’s voice. (Reading the Ecc.3 bits afterwards didn’t have the same effect and they were well chosen.)

Possible alternate design – have the Ecc.3 lines beside the original poem, instead of placed in line with it? As it is, my eye tries to scan it as an additional line of the original poem. Maybe a second hidden column just to the left, right-aligned?

Thoughts for the future. Great work.

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